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thank you for commenting. The reason the excerpt from the short story is so confusing is because it’s written in second person. The main character is you. You are Mary’s friend. The setting I thought was made quite clear. The place is Hopper Creek, a made up place (obviously) and the time can be any time you want. I am writing this story so that everyone, no matter who reads it, will be the story. I hope I cleared up any confusion. And if I didn’t, I don’t plan on following any of the normal standards for what “writing” is. The main event that throws everything into confusion is actually not until the very end (Spoilers). My point being, and no disrespect is intended, if something is strange, it’s because I want it to be. The length is, concerning your earlier question, well, I don’t know yet. I’ve written the ending and the beginning. Just not the middle. And it is for a competition. Again, thanks for your feedback.

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This is only my third post, and I just need some feedback on the first part of a short story I’m writing for a contest. It’s called “Nothing Ever Happens in Hopper Creek” and it’s meant to be a horror-like story, but it ifs not tell me. It’s also written in second person to make the reader feel part of the story. Please let me have all feedback, good and bad, so I can change what needs to be changed before I go any further. Thanks! Here’s the first part:

 

Nothing ever happens in Hopper Creek. There aren’t even any animals. It’s a small town, with everybody living on the same street, with the store and school and stuff on another street. The population is less than 100. You could say it’s more like an advanced colony than a town. Everybody knows everybody else. The only exciting thing is when Jack Ross, one of your best friends, throws a party. Which is about every week. You were at one of these parties when it started. The feeling of someone watching you. Studying you. As you go to get some more punch, you see a shadow flicker in the window. But you dismiss it as your imagination. Your friend Mary walks up to you, obviously distressed about something. “Hey…” She slowly draws out the word, hesitantly. “Hi,” You say back. “Do you have that feeling someone’s watching you?” The question took you by surprise. Mary was never one to be paranoid. “Why?” “I just feel like something is…” As she finished the sentence, she looked out the window and her face froze in an expression of sheer terror. You looked too, but all you saw was… Well, you don’t know what you saw. If you didn’t know any better you would say it was a claw. A three fingered claw. It was gone in a moment, but the image lingered in your mind. “I’ve… Got to go. See ya.” She basically yelled the words as she ran out the door, leaving you to ponder the… Whatever you saw. Just about then Jack turned up the music, and no one heard the scream.

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As the show progressed, and new doctors emerged, they became, well, more serious. Let’s start with the revival, number Nine. He was cheeky, and funny, but that was to cover up the shame of what he’d done. Ten was still not ready to confront his actions, and as Davros himself put it “Never looking back, because he dare not.” Eleven, I could start a blog with. I’ll keep it simple by using a quote from him, “We’re all just stories, in the end.” I know people reading this  are going NOT THAT QUOTE AGAIN!!!!! But listen. People can analize this phrase, look at it from every angle, and never get what it truly means. You have to think of the shame and sadness of Eleven. After losing all those companions, and his PLANET! Now you all think, well all the other Doctors did too, but you’re wrong. He lost something more than that. When he said that quote, he was thinking of everyone he had loved and lost. All that shame and sorrow, and he tries to make jokes and laugh, but there are some moments where he just can’t take it anymore. That is why Eleven is my favorite Doctor. He has to bear more shame than all of the other doctors, and that is enought to make you almost pity him. Not as a weak man, though, but pity him for how strong he has to be.

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This is my first post, and I would like to say something about the episode “Love and Monsters”. My all time favorite Doctor Who quote is “We forget because we must.” from that episode. People look at it and go “Oh, that’s deep.” and don’t think about it anymore. They don’t realize how deep it actually goes. It means the pain in our lives is so great, we must forget it or we will be consumed by the pain, or fear, or whatever. It would destroy us, creating something out of us that we were never meant to be. That is why we forget. We forget the great pain, and shove it down in us where we never remember. It comes to the surface, I think, when we are faced with the same thing again. Just my philosophic thoughts on that.

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